Sand Trap

Distraught inside an hourglass

Shoveling sand to make time last

So much time has already pass

Distraught inside an hourglass

Can’t let go of the life he has

Soon a dark shadow will be cast

Distraught inside an hourglass

Shoveling sand to make time last

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12 thoughts on “Sand Trap

  1. The imagery of someone trying to shovel more sand into an hourglass to prolong their life is fantastic! Love the subject you chose for the triolet. You rendered the form beautifully. Terrific job! 🙂

  2. Nice and so much tension filled in the sound of the poem. You know how they say “Make hay while the sun shines”. It reminds me of that. Well written.

  3. This is great – like Cubby I was really taken by the imagery which was somewhat amusing but very serious all at the same time.

    Did you write the rhyming lines first? That’s what I did, I found it got harder after that 😉

    1. Thank you Pooky. Yes, Once I got my first two lines, then I went from there. Counting syllables on my fingers was kind of fun. It got hard around the fifth line and then I was able to come full circle.

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